Labour

Gasps of pain thundered, releasing heavy breaths at hurricane speeds.  One final push seared a wound, slashing the sky open, birthing rain to life; ending labour with a sigh that evaporated into silence.

In my side of the world thunderstorms have been disturbing my peace for two whole days now.  So when this weekend’s Tifextra challenge asked us to personify an inanimate object I thought that it was time for some wishful payback.

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36 comments on “Labour

  1. Dawn Lamond says:

    Nice! Powerful use personification

  2. Good one… very intense, too! I like! 🙂

  3. jwilliams057 says:

    Very cool. You really made the storm come to life.

  4. joetwo says:

    A nice take on weather.

  5. atrm61 says:

    “slashing the sky open” & “with a sigh..”-lovely personifications:-)

  6. Cobbie's World says:

    Lots of good lines in such a short amount of words! “Evapourated into silence” is, perhaps, my favourite. Very well done!

  7. barbara says:

    intense and powerful. I have seen some storms that needed a birthing rain! 🙂

  8. jannatwrites says:

    You brought the storm to life, and it was intimidating!

  9. Draug419 says:

    I like listening to spring thunderstorms. Your piece brought them back in the midst of this cold winter >__<

  10. deanabo says:

    This is really good!

  11. Makes me imagine for sure. The words force me to. Well done.

  12. Gina says:

    I tend to love thunderstorms and watching lightening. Makes me feel safe. Maybe I haven’t been in one so long lasting.

  13. Suzanne says:

    Beautiful writing! Love your imagery so much – great take on the prompt!

  14. kymminbarcelona says:

    So, it’s not angels bowling, but angels giving birth! Cool.

  15. Sandra says:

    Very gripping! Well done.

  16. Amelia says:

    This was awesome, beautifully (painfully) written.

  17. Love it. So similar to childbirth that stormchilds coming.

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