Gasps of pain thundered, releasing heavy breaths at hurricane speeds. One final push seared a wound, slashing the sky open, birthing rain to life; ending labour with a sigh that evaporated into silence.
In my side of the world thunderstorms have been disturbing my peace for two whole days now. So when this weekend’s Tifextra challenge asked us to personify an inanimate object I thought that it was time for some wishful payback.
Nice! Powerful use personification
Thank you Dawn.
Good one… very intense, too! I like! 🙂
Thanks, I’m glad you did.
Very cool. You really made the storm come to life.
A nice take on weather.
Hehe 🙂 thank you
“slashing the sky open” & “with a sigh..”-lovely personifications:-)
Thank you, I really enjoyed writing this one.
Lots of good lines in such a short amount of words! “Evapourated into silence” is, perhaps, my favourite. Very well done!
What a nice, kind comment 🙂 thank you very much. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
intense and powerful. I have seen some storms that needed a birthing rain! 🙂
heh 🙂 thank you for stopping by.
You brought the storm to life, and it was intimidating!
Oh thank you 🙂
I like listening to spring thunderstorms. Your piece brought them back in the midst of this cold winter >__<
I’m glad to be of service Draug 😉
This is really good!
Makes me imagine for sure. The words force me to. Well done.
I’m glad it does, thank you for saying so.
I tend to love thunderstorms and watching lightening. Makes me feel safe. Maybe I haven’t been in one so long lasting.
I usually like them to, while I am tucked in my bed – makes me feel cosier somehow.
Beautiful writing! Love your imagery so much – great take on the prompt!
Thank you very much Suzanne I appreciate your comment 🙂
So, it’s not angels bowling, but angels giving birth! Cool.
I was angry at the weather at the time so it had to be about pain.
Very gripping! Well done.
Thank you very much!
This was awesome, beautifully (painfully) written.
Thank you very much Amelia 🙂
Love it. So similar to childbirth that stormchilds coming.
Hehe ^_^ thank you.