Everlasting

His eyes followed her wrinkles, as deep as the Grand Canyon, recalling the birth of each one.  Her milky eyes smiled at him for the millionth time and his heart leapt, yet again.

This is for Trifextra; a 33 word story using a hyperbole.  It was quite difficult! I scrapped about five thousand ideas and shot out curses that shuddered the walls before this came to be.  Hope you like it.

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18/02/2013: Thank you Trifecta, this means a lot!

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28 comments on “Everlasting

  1. lumdog says:

    You rocked the house with this one!! Great job.

  2. grandmalin says:

    Oh – that’s beautiful! xxoo

  3. Suzanne says:

    Oh that’s beautiful Sandra! Great use of hyperbole!

  4. Sandra says:

    Nice one. Beautiful in fact.

  5. Draug419 says:

    Oh, so lovely! (:

  6. kymminbarcelona says:

    So sweet!
    I don’t think I’d mind having wrinkles if they were likened to the Grand Canyon!
    I MEAN THAT IN ALL HYPERBOLE.

  7. sourcookies says:

    Your writing is great! Very nice!

  8. Gina says:

    This is so sweet. I’m getting wrinkles that size. It’s true, they can seem that big!

  9. This is great – reminds me of a happy couple in their later years

  10. atrm61 says:

    True love transcends all barriers-even wrinkles as deep as Grand Canyon;-)Excellent piece Sandra:-)

  11. tedstrutz says:

    Congrats Sandra… this is a lovely Valentine.

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