Vlad’s Love II

For years Vlad had studied her full lips and watched her figure swaying alluring, teasing, arousing him.  But she never saw him there, faithfully pining away, withering, starved of love.  He would have borne it if she remained alone, her heart unattached, untaken. But she hadn’t.  She fell for the other man.

Seeing them in love, it broke him so he broke her in turn; her and the other man.  How they had screamed!  But now Vlad was even more desperate. His handiwork, which had seemed ingenious at first, had sealed their fate to remain forever encased together and him alone, watching.

Vlad wouldn’t have that.  He loved her too much to share.

With a chisel for remodelling, a doctor for scraping and a towel to wipe away the blood not yet dried up, Vlad set to work. Piece by piece he cut her loose. The remnants of the unwanted figure he burned.  The smell of flesh sweetened Vlad’s efforts. One figure remained; hers.  Vlad sculpted and moulded and then stepped back and beheld her.

Her arms were spread, beckoning.  Her lips were smiling, inviting. And her figure was unchanged, as alluring as ever.  Vlad’s own lips smiled.  He moved towards her, placed his head on her shoulder and his body within her arms.

Now she was truly his.

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This morning Trifecta gave us the word ‘Doctor’.  I am ashamed to say but I have never heard or read the word used in the meaning given, that is:

a : material added (as to food) to produce a desired effect

b : a blade (as of metal) for spreading a coating or scraping a surface

So I scoured my brain, chewed my nails and bit my lips.  I did that all day really, until I remembered a story I did for a Friday Fictioneers challenge some weeks back.  I thought that this kind of ‘doctor’ would fit in quite well if I extended the story a little bit and stretched my imagination further.

And here it is.  The first 1oo words belong to Friday Fictioneers.  The second 119 words belong to Trifecta.  And technically, all 219 that make the total, are yours to enjoy, critisise, and decipher.

 

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43 comments on “Vlad’s Love II

  1. steph says:

    Wow, I like it. I’ve never heard of a doctor used for scraping either, but you put it to good use. Did he sculpt himself to her or just gets to use her whenever he wants? Either way he’s one creepy dude. Great story.

  2. Draug419 says:

    Oh this is so good! Great use of the third definition! 😀

  3. El Guapo says:

    That’s both disturbing and beautiful.

  4. zennjennc says:

    I knew I had read that somewhere. Love the continuation. Great story complete.

  5. jannatwrites says:

    Steph’s comment cracked me up….I had similar thoughts 🙂 I like how you used the ‘doctor’ prompt…I think the noun isn’t as natural to use as the verb, making it more difficult to write.

  6. kz says:

    loved how you used doctor in this.. but most of all i loved the darkness! really good

  7. tedstrutz says:

    a towel to wipe away the blood … got to have good tools…

  8. ‘So I scoured my brain, chewed my nails and bit my lips’. I am so glad you did, just look at the result! Creepy – dark side emerging.

  9. Eugene Uttley says:

    I think this piece leaves a lot to the reader to decide what has occurred.
    I like that a lot.

  10. Kir Piccini says:

    I loved this, favorite one so far. the ending was just perfect.
    Love hurts sometimes. 😉

  11. kymminbarcelona says:

    Blehck. just. *shiver*

  12. Bee says:

    Dark and totally creeptastic! Awesome way to use doctor as a noun, which I thought was really hard.

  13. lumdog says:

    Creepy and disturbing. Well done!

  14. barbara says:

    *shivers (deliciously so)

  15. Kitty says:

    Deliciously horrible! The insanity and obsession is so well written that you have freaked me out a little.

  16. Youch….. Like the comment above – deliciously horrible.

  17. Sarah Ann says:

    This is great. I hadn’t heard of ‘doctor’ being used in this way. You’ve got it down really well. The list of tools, ‘With a chisel for remodelling, a doctor for scraping and a towel to wipe away the blood…’ is so descriptive and apt. Love it.

  18. Sandra says:

    I’m glad you did, thank you Sarah.

  19. christina says:

    this was super cool. great use of the word.

  20. Tasneem says:

    Man that’s disturbing. I like it

  21. atrm61 says:

    Ah ha!Just how I like it-totally chilling piece ,with an obsessive lover cutting his beloved into pieces,then sculpting her -what fine doctoring;-)Loved this Sandra:)

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