Copyright – Beth Carter

“We’ve built a car!” they had sung.  It must have been years, but the time we passed together made them fly.  We flew together.  Everywhere we went people would look, stare, laugh.  But we never minded, we had each other and we were happy.

I used to flatter myself that I wasn’t just an object to them.  I was loved. I held memories in my possession, beautiful instances in life that I clutched within me, not letting them flash by.  And they loved me for it.

Or so I thought.  But now here I am, forgotten, betrayed, ridiculed and disillusioned.

Every Wednesday I visit Friday Fictioneers and scroll down as fast as my slow internet connection would let me.  Anticipation rises within me as the picture for the week comes closer.  Then I see it.  I gasp. Then stare at it for long minutes. I sit silent and I ponder. The little story then starts to bud, tickling my imagination with shallow roots that grown longer as the day passes…

I’m tired, forgive me! I hope you like this one.

47 comments on “Trash

  1. Oh, nice…first I thought it was a parent talking, then realized it was the car. But it could read as a parent who had the car with the children and now is no longer cared for. I like the ambiguity (or maybe I’m just tired, too! ) 🙂

    • Sandra says:

      It wasn’t meant to be ambiguous. The cetainty of who the character is was supposed to comeout in the last sentence and the title. Then again, I was very tired too when I wrote so I will absolutely not blame you for your interpretation; I’ll do better next time (I hope).

      • Your interpretation came through clearly. However, when I skimmed at first, I thought of the parent and realized later I still might possibly maybe squeeze that interpretation if I really worked at it. It was well-written. But sometimes other interpretations are possible even in the best writing and that’s not necessarily bad. This time it was just me being in a hurry.

  2. Nice twist to have the protagonist the car. Good job.

  3. tedstrutz says:

    The Car’s Voice… nice job.

  4. kz says:

    great writing from the car’s pov. really sad…

  5. That’s an interesting take. Like Toy Story, such stories are always slightly tragic. It makes me want to go hug my scooter. 🙂

  6. yepiratehere says: caught human nature just right there, more than in one way…and yes, the car a substitute for a couple of things that come to mind..very clever indeed…

  7. Sandra says:

    Very sad; I’m a sucker for anthropomorphic stories. You should see me when I part with my cars. Very well done.

  8. Sad, sad, sad… I enjoyed that very much..
    I always feel so sad for inanimate objects, once loved, now forgotten.. 😉

  9. Abraham says:

    I like it. I like your outro as well 🙂

  10. elappleby says:

    Not forgotten at all! Here we all are writing stories about it! Great little story 🙂

  11. Dear Sandra,
    Poignant story. I’m one of those who gets attached to my cars. Your story put me in mind of a favorite David Wilcox song. click the link to hear it.

  12. The other half of that is: if cars could talk and tell all that went on inside them…wow.

  13. rich says:

    well done. good to see you. something to think about – in this line: “…in my possession; beautiful instances in…” that semicolon after “possession” should really be a comma. up to you though.

  14. Joe Owens says:

    Ah the personification! I was thinking in the first paragraph it was one of the owners of the car, but then i realized in the second it was the car’s story. Can’t you just imagine if all the things in our life could talk what stories they might tell.

  15. bnatividad says:

    I love that the story is told from the car’s point of view.

  16. Awww…poor old car. You know old cars have feelings too!

  17. Very nice, of course a car like that has its own voice. 🙂

  18. Parul says:

    The car’s perspective! Good thinking!
    This made an interesting read.

  19. To be discarded. If cars had a thought I wonder if this is what they would think once they were left to sit. Great take on the picture.

  20. Michael Fishman says:

    The two words that came to mind after I read this were “bittersweet” and “quaint” I understand the first but not the second unless I picked up on some part of the car’s personality or I just identified with the car? I don’t know. Regardless, you made me feel something and that means good writing in my book.

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