Infected

Your wisdom dazzled me.

Admiration came easy.

I knew nothing.

You taught me everything.

 *

I liked you at first

Then loved you.

What did I know?

Nothing!

*

I gave you all I had.

You threw it all away with the morning trash.

Now you try to infect me with your wretchedness,

Your soul devoured by loneliness.

*

You say I know nothing.

But I know that walls pile high about you

And the chisel to set you free

Lies buried under the morning trash.

Today Trifecta gave us the word INFECT.  I tried my hand at poetry.  How did I do?

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30 comments on “Infected

  1. deanabo says:

    I have been here. You wrote it well.

  2. Gina says:

    So sad but it feels like she is gathering strength and understanding and courage. Nicely done, Sandra!

  3. I guess suggesting counseling is a little late 🙂

  4. You did well 🙂 Free writing and not rhyming is always more powerful to read. Believe me I have learnt the hard way 🙂

  5. Sandra says:

    You captured that certain stage of a relationship beautifully. Well done.

  6. jannatwrites says:

    Some walls are best left untoppled….and some people are best left alone. I hope she takes her chisel and goes elsewhere…

  7. Kir Piccini says:

    for every person who ever did this to someone, who dazzled and then destroyed them with the things they did…it was perfect. This touched a part of me that still remembers how awful that felt.

    WOW.

  8. joetwo says:

    Very nice piece! Well done!

  9. Brian Benoit says:

    “Your soul devoured by loneliness” – A good line, that, and it’s easy to imagine how one person’s unhappiness can be infectious. Nicely done

  10. Draug419 says:

    I love how the last line links back to an earlier part of the poem. I think you did a great job!

  11. Christine says:

    I love the bit about the chisel – that’s a great image. I say you did quite well with poetry!

  12. kymminbarcelona says:

    I gave you all I had.
    You threw it all away with the morning trash.

    Those two lines together are devastating.

  13. Sini says:

    Realizing that you were not valued is pretty devastating. I liked the last lines which shows the understanding that it was you who could have made things better and because of his actions he is trapped in the walls.

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