Exe switched on the light and, on cue, the screaming started – hysterical, tortured sounds that Exe knew were not coming out of pain. He knew, because Exe knew pain. He knew it by the expression in the eyes; conjuring pity. By smell; the salty sweat released from the exhausted being. By touch; the heat emanating from the feverish body.
Knowing this, Exe knew that the helpless, shapeless creature that now lay before him beholding its own reflection was not screaming out of pain but in horror; revulsion at the beast it had now become.
Exe put away his tools and smiled at a job well done.
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This was for Friday Fictioneers and inspired by the picture below. Not what you were expecting, huh?
I’m not sure “like” is the proper response. My face is still screwed up in an “Ewwwww” expression but you wrote this extremely well.
janet
It’s okay – I can imagine the expression by rememering what my face looked like when I finished the first draft! Thanks for reading, Janet.
Ohhh, that’s positively sick..good, but sick.
Haha 😀 Good, thanks.
Such intensity in your writing…so evil. lol
😀 Thank you, Maggie, that is a wonderful copliment! 😉
I’m glad I’m not the only one who envisioned dark things happening to this creature. I’m usually quite fond of stuffed animals… Creepily concocted! Well done.
The image just begs for a twisted piece to go with it! That’s my humble opinion, at least!
I hope this doesn’t give me nightmares
Confession: This story came from a nightmare! I’ve been waiting for the right prompt for it since I woke up sweating, breathless and almost crying!
Oh dear. Turn the light back off! Good one, Sandra…in a creepy, skin-crawling kind of way. 😉
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you, Rochelle! 😀
Well-written but cruel story! 😉
Yes. Agreed on the ‘cruel’. Thank you on the ‘well-written’.
That is extremely sinister… brrr! Well-crafted though!
thank you, Freya – I’m happy you think it’s sinister. Bwahhahaha!!
Wow — this was an intense story after reading the other whimsical takes on the strange animal. The creepiness comes right through, with your descriptions of how Exe knows the details of pain and the horror of the creature.
This started out as a 300-word story. The details were way more intense!
Definitely not what I was expecting! I assumed this week would be full of fluffy, chirpy stories – how wrong was I!
Very creepy. Very original.
Heh 🙂 Think again! Thanks a lot for your comment.
Very spooky. Indeed.
Thank you, Sandra.
Story well done!
Thanks Perry 🙂
Oh that was very creepy, made me shiver!
Well done for such a different take on the fluffy photo!
Dee
Thanks a lot, Dee.
E eeee yaaaa oooooo hhooooooo noooooo.. ! 🙂
😀
Wow, that’s quite a dark tale, in the best traditions of the mad scientist. Well done.
Thank you, David.
As creepy as the soft toy – the impact of revulsion when I first saw the prompt is matched well in your sick flash, exceptionally well written – overtones of pure evil, great descriptive writing. I feel a little sick actually, wish I hadn’t just eaten an ice cream before reading it!
HAHA 😀 Sorry for that! Thanks for reading, though.
That’s okay – I still enjoyed my ice-cream!
IT’S ALIIIIIIIIIIVE! This was wonderful, darling! My initial association was Frankenstein, but now I’m also reminded of Jack Nicholson in Batman, after having plastic surgery by that wacky doctor.
Both were good associations to the twisted mind of this character. Thanks for your comment, Helena.
Well, I liked it!
Scott
Mine:
http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/06/05/friday-fictioneers-672013-invasion-seriously-pg13/
Good 🙂 Thank you.
I would say Exe sounds like a mad scientist enjoying ghastly experiments… well told
He does, doesn’t he? Thank you, Bjorn.
evil, so evil! well done 🙂