Invasion, NY


Copyright – Jan Wayne Fields

Invasion, NY

We watched them stomp across the water into the harbour; marching in a disciplined straight line, their giraffe-like necks moving backwards and forwards with each stride.

We were the last to leave; squeezed into the only remaining boat that was much too small.

The invaders made it inland and the screams became a howl; a frenzied cry of terror that carried over the water, past the broken statue.

Then another sound.

The motor on our boat coughed and died. Β Our eyes mirrored terror, then resignation as we waited while the current carried us back towards the screams.

For Friday Fictioneers.Β  Hope you liked it πŸ™‚

18 comments on “Invasion, NY

  1. Jim Kane says:

    I like your story and I wish you well with your novel. I wrote one last fall as part of National Novel Writing Month. It was quite the experience!



    • Sandra says:

      Mine has been in the making for three years and it’s been ready to be sent to agents for a third of that time…my courage fails me! Good luck with yours πŸ˜‰

      • msteck says:

        Fire up that courage and send it in! Life is too short to not take every chance we can get. Or maybe self publish? That’s what I am planning to do with mine. πŸ™‚

  2. Jan Brown says:

    Very well written, very effective!

  3. Sci-fi rarely ends well. πŸ™‚ Good use of the prompt.


  4. Bumba says:

    Good one. maybe Ton Cruise can save the day.

    • Sandra says:

      Woohoo! I had the ‘War of the Worlds’ sound in my head while writing the whole thing…do you remember that creepy sound the bots made while walking? It was a constant beat throughout the film – it set my teeth on edge real bad!

  5. Dear Sandra,

    I’ll never look at giraffes the same way. Good one.



  6. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Sandra,

    Invasion plumbs our deepest fears. The fuel running out is a nice touch.



  7. Adam Ickes says:

    This… was… awesome! I want more!

  8. helenmidgley says:

    I loved the terror in the ending πŸ™‚

  9. Great story! I love the ending.

  10. msteck says:

    I can feel the indignation at the end. Great job!

  11. Eena says:

    Oh no! The color’s left my own cheeks for those refugees.
    Nice work!

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