One; choose your prey.
Easy. There he is across the bar, shining like a violet beacon in a sea of black. Wearing a white polo-shirt in a place like this says something about a man. For me, it says he wants to be eaten, devoured and spat out again. Happy to oblige.
Two; study your prey.
Stay hidden. Watch him jump from one girl to the next, testing his tired array of lines, touching the collar of his shirt, making sure it is still stiff, still lining his jaw; a confirmation that he is still the man.
Three; hone in.
Move towards the bar. Order a drink. Just sit for one, two, three seconds.
He materializes by the stool in less than a heartbeat. His beer breath only partially masked by the heavy cologne wafting out of the cotton threads.
‘Hey, beautiful,’ he hisses in what he thinks is an alluring tone.
Smile thinly. Look away.
‘You been here before?’
Catch his eye briefly. Battle with your lips; pretend you’re holding back a smile.
‘Ah! Don’t be shy! Let me buy you a drink, what are you having?’
Glance briefly at the glass and smile with your eyes.
‘Hey,you! Another of whatever she’s having…I’m Mike, by the way.’
Let your smile spread all the way. Whisper a name, any name; make it inaudible.
‘Say that again.’
Lean into him, let your cheeks brush briefly, accidentally. Sip at the drink, let your eyes meet over the glass, linger your gaze, look away suddenly as if shy.
‘Hey, beautiful, listen, what do you say if we get out of this noise…go for a walk some place quiet?’
Study your lap. Hide a smile. Pretend you’re considering.
Four; jump for the kill.
Meet his gaze, smile, nod; ‘I know a place. You’ll like it. No one will disturb us there.’
Stand. Walk. Don’t bother glancing back. He’ll be following; a willing victim trapped by lust. No guilt. No remorse. Let the animal out.
For Trifecta where the magic word this week is Animal: 3 : a human being considered chiefly as physical or nonrational; also : this nature
Oh yeah! Nicely done!
Ooh!I likey!Strategic planning at its best-she definitely is a cool customer-wondering if she is “thirsty” 😉 Great job Sandra:-)
Hehe 🙂 thanks Atreyee!
Wow,strategy and lust – dangerous combination! You brought it out well.
Thank you 🙂
I agree, she is one cool customer. Anyone who still uses the line, you been here before, deserves what they get. 🙂 Nice writing!
Oh, I totally agree; there are some very lame pick-up lines out there! Thanks for your comment. Steph.
I’d like to know what she has planned for him.
I was actually thinking Queen of Sheeba – American Gods, but I couldn’t get to there in 333 words : |
Woah. Intense! I love all the details, the calculatedness. Great job!
Very nicely crafted.
Thank you! 🙂
I like the irony in this. He’s moving through the bar stalking his prey, having no idea that he IS the prey 🙂 She’s actually scary, how she’s so matter-of-fact about it all.
Glad that part came out clear. Thanks for your comment, Janna.
This is the kind of story that makes me happy that I’m married. Well written, paced, and thought out. Nicely done. You’ve got my Trifecta vote!
Aw that’s so kind! thank you!
Queen of Sheeba, yes! Totally! It could be the title!!!
But it’s like she hardly has to even lay the trap. It’s like he’s building the trap while she sits there.
Wonderful piece, Sandra!
Beautiful women don’t need to lay traps. men just fall on their laps…I think.
Wonder if she’s a fanged friend again…or just a plain criminal… Turned tables are nice
Turned tables are very nice! Thanks, Bjorn.
You have absolutely got to have a plan for these things. 🙂 Thanks for linking up. Don’t forget to vote!