For years Vlad had studied her full lips and watched her figure swaying alluring, teasing, arousing him. But she never saw him there, faithfully pining away, withering, starved of love. He would have borne it if she remained alone, her heart unattached, untaken. But she hadn’t. She fell for the other man. Seeing them in love, it broke him so he broke her in turn; her and the other man. How they had screamed! But now Vlad was even more desperate. His handiwork, which had seemed ingenious at first, had now sealed their fate to remain encased together eternally and him alone, watching.
I loved this week’s Friday Fictioneers prompt, but I hated that I was limited by 100 words I had so many gruesome scenarios in my head, but I hope that what I had in mind came across anyway.
Chilling little entry this week. Whoever said “hell hath no fury as a woman scorned” never met Vlad. Nice one.
One grammatical note: I think you mean He would have “borne” it…rather than “bore”.
Oh!!! Yes that’s what I meant, thank you!
I tried to amend the mistake, but I am at work and the site is restricted so I cannot access the ‘Edit’ section. Now that I know that there’s a mistake it’s killing me! Please accept my apologies and imagine there’s an ‘n’ in there until the eight hours pass and I can run home and change this.
Sorry and thank you for your imagination!
Gruesome indeed! Sealed together forever inside – a very disturbing image. And a great idea. Glad you liked the prompt.
I certainly did; I love when I can let my dark and gory side come out bwahhahhhaaa!
And the horror stories begin… Nicely done!
I thank thee 😉
nice! I enjoyed this one!
Oohh, nice! Slithers like a snake. Well-done!
Snakes? *squeal* 😐 Thank you 🙂
Sqqqqquuueeeeaaalll! Eerie! shivers!
Hehe 🙂 Just as intended 😉
I really like this one, so clever and sadistically sad!
Thanks Penny, mind I am not a sadistic person by nature, but somehow most of my characters’ fates end horribly!
oh, a nice little horror story packaged here in 100 words.
Thank you 🙂
Haha! Thank you Sandra
I know the feeling. Sometimes it’s so hard to pick just one gruesome plot and try and squeeze in all the morbidly delicious goodness into 100 words. You did a fine job of it though 🙂
Thank you very much ma’am 😉
This is chilling!
Scary but well written!
Thanks Parul, I appreciate your comment ^__^
Love the name Vlad. It really goes well with Managua’s gory count. Well told.
I was thinking Count Dracula, which is strange because this has nothing to do with vampires. Then again the name Vlad has a sense of evilness about it. Maybe it’s because it rhymes with blood!
Seems like everyone lost out here because it sounds if Vlad is suffering forever, due to his own revenge.
Revenge is best served cold; gives you time to think things through. Or even better, don’t wish evil onto others and just let them be!
Nice and macabre. And so we often find out too late, that evil intentions have betrayed us. 🙂
Good grip on the moral of the story, thanks for reading.
Poor Vlad – although he did kind of deserve it. I really enjoyed this.
I actually have the same mixed feelings about this! Thank you, I’m happy you enjoyed it.
It reminded me of Poe’s story about the Cask and the girl.
Poe?!! Oh my what a compliment! Thank you very much Scott.
Good psycho story. Vlad has a slight jealous streak, I’d say. Ron
You got the mild hint, didn’t you?
Chiling take on the prompt. Very well written. Vlad reminds me of Vlad the Impaler. http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2013/02/01/fridayfictioneers-janus
Vlad the Impaler! That is actually a really good one 🙂
If I cannot have you no man can. Vlad is a jealous sort it seems. I get the full intent and think you did just fine with the alotted words.
I’m glad to hear that! Thank you for reading Joe.
Heheheh, I am enjoying the many murderous takes on this prompt. My first inclination was love, but the image drew me away from that and into demise.
Hehe! Blood and gore where the first things that came to my mind, then again that is almost through with every prompt in my case!
I will keep that in mind. I love a good murder/mystery scenario!
Well, that gave me the shudders! Well told – I went from feeling mildly sympathetic to poor rejected Vlad, to horrified, and more horrified when I realized what he did to the two of them.
Oh the story reached its purposed then, thank you very much for reading 🙂
Serves Vlad right to be alone forever now. Scary stuff here.
Somehow, I still felt sorry for him! Thanks for stopping by.
Your story demonstrate vividly the saying that, ‘holding a grudge is like taking poison and hoping someone else dies from it.’ Very nicely done. Vlad the impaler comes to mind, too. Was that your intent? If so, excellent choice of a anme for your MC.
I wasn’t thinking Vlad the impaler per se, it’s just that I associate Vlad with a dark and possibly evil personality so I thought it fit the purpose here.
he might be alone – but he does not have my sympathy. well done.