Pick-Up

He revved the well-oiled engine and bounced his brows in her direction.

‘You wanna ride?’

‘Maybe in ten years’ time.’

The engine attached to his bicycle coughed and died, as did his ego.

For Trifecta: ‘33 words about anything you want.  Your piece must include at least one hyphenated compound modifier.’  And here’s mine…thanks for reading.

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18 comments on “Pick-Up

  1. Suzanne says:

    Aw, poor guy! Love this Sandra! Great compound modifier — and I love the bit where he “bounced his brows in her direction.” Awesome!

  2. Lumdog says:

    Even the eyebrow action couldn’t save him from ignominious defeat. Cool story! 🙂

    • Sandra says:

      Hehe 🙂 Eyebrow action rarely does. Now if he had some good conversation up his sleeve, that would have been a completely different story.

  3. atrm61 says:

    Tch!Tch!Nothing worse than being rejected when you think you are the cat’s whiskers,lol!Poor guy!I agree with Suzanne:-)

  4. Draug419 says:

    awwww too cute

  5. Aw, poor kid. 🙂 Great response.

  6. Mike says:

    How come women, of all ages, know just how to dent a fellows ego? So unfair!
    Loved your story – made me smile.

  7. September Dreams says:

    Nice closing punch… ‘as did his ego’. Good one.

  8. ann bennett says:

    It’s hard to keep the squares of cardboard pinned just so to his the wheel’s spokes. I can feel the breeze in my hair.

  9. jannatwrites says:

    It’s hard to be cool when machinery won’t cooperate 🙂 Poor guy!

  10. tedstrutz says:

    bouncing-brows… love it!

  11. Sounds like something I would’ve tried!
    I missed the linking limit on the post.
    Mine is at https://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com
    Scott

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